Wednesday, May 28, 2014

THE SUN CHALLENGER

He designed a plane.
Then he built and flew his plane.
But was he content?
No. Not yet. Not he.

So he designed a bigger plane.
He built and flew that plane.
But was he content?
No. Not yet. Not he.

So he designed a faster plane.
He built and flew that plane.
But was he content?
No. Not yet. Not he.

He designed a jet
to fly fast and high and free
And he followed Icarus
into the Aegean Sea.


11 comments:

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    1. Thanks, Sheila. I'm not really a poet. I wrote this for a Gather prompt a few years ago, but I'm much more comfortable with prose.

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  2. Not sure if I should be giggling, but I love this.

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    1. However it makes you respond to it is good, Pam. I love that it made you feel something.

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  3. Nice! Love the ending. Not yet, not he = anaphora. Fast and high and free = polysyndeton. That these show up "instinctively" shows you have a sense of rhythm. That these things have names isn't the point anyway; the point is being aware of that sense of rhythm. Thanks for responding. Well done.
    Doug

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    1. Thank you, Doug for the thoughtful comment and the compliment.

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    2. A friend observed that when read aloud, it reminded her of the sputtering of a plane.

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  4. Really loved the poem. Great Job!

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    1. Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Kathy. The original prompt that inspired this was to dedicate a poem to one of the Greek Muses. I chose Melpomene, the Greek Muse of Tragedy.

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  5. Wonderful poem! The story of Icarus for ever repeated.

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    1. Thank you. It seems that every one who has interpreted this has had a unique response to it. When I first posted it, one of the readers said it reminded him of a child playing with his toys in the bathtub. That made me smile. I felt honored to be able to see my simple little poem through his eyes.

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